Engelsk Informal-Letter, nogle som kan rette?

Engelsk Informal-Letter, nogle som kan rette? Stefan Anonym
Hej, jeg har lavet en engelsk opgave, som skulle være valgfrit.
Jeg har derfor valgt at skrive et "Informal Letter" til min fætter fra Montenegro :-))
Nogle som kan rette denne stil? :-))
Tusind tak på forhånd.

INFORMAL LETTER



Hey Milisav

In a long time, I have thought about to write a letter, because I really miss all of you, how do it goes in school, is it hard?
I have begun in a new school, ”********”. It is hard but also fun and interesting.
How do grandfatherr and uncle have it? There don’t go one day where I don’t think about you and the rest of the family. I can’t wait to next summer, to come down, and have it fun and play football and all kind of stuff.
How does it go on the farm, are there much to do? We have it good, I work in a big market and earn my own money, and it is really funny, mot not like your job. Do you still fish, and do you catch something? I can really not wait to come down and catch some fish.

I had a really wired dream yesterday. It was about me and you, we was on a ship, on the big ocean. The water was almost transparent; we could see all the fish in the water. It was a really sunshine day. We where fishing, but didn’t catch anything, it was a long day but suddenly the weather turn and it began to rain and thunderstorm.
The waves were huge, it makes the ship moving side by side, I was scared and terrified, and you screamed that you want to try one more time.
And you did you throw the line in the water and only after few second a giant fish jumped out of the water, and grab the madding, you hold the fishing rod, but the fish was to strong it pull so hard that you fall down in the water.

And then I wake up, I was totally sweaty and terrified, but enough of that I hope you all have it good and I repeats myself. I can’t wait to come again, my father has talking something about that we maybe will come to winter but we will se.

here goes......... anonym
Hi Milisav, For a long time I have been thinking about writing a letter,because I do miss you all.How`s school,is it hard? I have started a new school,it is hard but also very interessting. How`s granddad and uncle? Not one day goes by when I do not think about you(s)and the rest of the family.I can`t wait for next summer to come when I will bee coming coming (to see you`s all) have fun ,play football (footy)and all kinds of stuff.How`s the farm(going)?,is there much to do? We are fine and I `am working in a big market and earning my own money.It is really funny,not like your job! Do you still go fishing and if so do you catch anything? I can`t wait to come and catch some fish. Yesterday,I had a very weird dream.It was about you and me on a ship on the big ocean.The water(sea) was almost transparent,we could see all the fish (very clearly) in the water (sea).It was a day full of sunshine,we were fishing but did`nt catch anything.It was a long day but of a sudden the weather turned and it began to rain and thunder(there was a thunder storm). The waves were huge and it made she ship move from side to side.I was scared and also terrified,but you were screaming to do it one more time. You threw a line in the water (sea) and only after a few seconds a giant fish jumped out of the water and grabbed the bait.You held the fishing rod but the fish were so strong and it pulled so hard that you fell in the water . And then I woked up and I were sweaty and terrified(scared),but enough of that,I hope you are all well,I can`t wait to visit again.My father has been talking that we might come in the winter but we will have to see(wait and see).

rettelse af engelsk stil mousy200
Hejsa!

Jeg har lige nogle rettelser til din stil.

1. linie kan du skrive: I have been thinking for a while now, that it is time to write to you again. How is school.

2. How are your grandfather and uncle?
3. Have fun
4. Is there much to do
5. Not like your job
6. We were on a ship
7. It was a sunny day
8. The weather changed into a thunderstorm and it rained too
9. The ship was moving from side to side
10.You threw the fishing line into the water and a few seconds later a giant fish jumped out and it grabbed the bait. You held the fishing rod but the fish was to strong and it pulled so hard that you fell into the water.
11.I woke up
12.I hope you are well
13.I repeate myself
14.My father has been talking about to come and visit you in the winter but we will have to wait and see.

Som afslutning:

Hope you all are going well and hope to keep in touch.

From ......

Rettelser Et spørgsmål
Hej

Jeg vil gerne sige med det samme, at der stadigvæk er i fejl i de rettelser, der er blevet foreslået. Jeg har ikke tænkt mig at fortælle dig hvilke, da jeg ikke kan se, hvad du vil få ud af det andet end en god karakter. Nu ved du det, og så kan du jo selv prøve at finde dem.

Jeg tror ærlig talt, du ville få mere ud af det her og blive bedre til engelsk, hvis du havde spurgt om noget grammatisk frem for at lade folk gøre arbejdet for dig. Dig om det, selvfølgelig. Men det, du og andre gør, er da, hvad man kan betegne som en bjørnetjeneste (og en bjørnetjeneste betyder ikke en stor tjeneste, men derimod det modsatte)!

:-) Stefan Anonym
Tak :-))