Nogle der vil kigge/rette noget engelsk for mig? (HASTER)

Nogle der vil kigge/rette noget engelsk for mig? (HASTER) ccmmll
Hej

Jeg har skrevet en lille tekst, som jeg meget gerne vil have rettet for stavefejl og forkerte ordstillinger. Jeg har virkelig brug for det! På forhånd tak!

In the text “The global teenager” is the teenagers around the world described as very American teenagers. The text point of view is that American teenagers have a lot of influence on teenagers who don’t live in America. The text describes that young people looks like each other, even they live in Denmark or France. I agree that teenagers from America are helping to affect the fashion and the music in other countries. The famous stars, like Britney Spears, know what young people in America likes, and sing about thing, that young people will listen to. I am convinced that there is not the big different between teenagers from different countries, as many people imagine. Most teenagers just want to find out who they are, and what they want with their lives. Teenagers want to be independent of their parents, and want to chill out with their friends. And it doesn’t matter where they live. Of course young people will be affected by what they hear and see through TV programs. Young people doesn’t like to stand out of the crowd, because they really don’t know them self. When they finally find out who they are, it will be easier for them to dare to stand out.

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Jeg prøver A2.
In the text “The global teenager”, teenagers around the world are described as very American teenagers. The text's point of view is that American teenagers have a lot of influence on teenagers who don’t live in America.
The text describes that young people look like each other, whether they live in Denmark or France. I agree that teenagers from America are affecting the fashion and the music in other countries. The famous stars, like Britney Spears, know what young people in America likes, and sing about things that young people will listen to.
I am convinced that there is not as big a difference between teenagers from different countries, as many people imagine. Most teenagers just want to find out who they are, and what they want with their lives. Teenagers want to be independent of their parents, and want to chill out with their friends. And it doesn’t matter where they live.
Naturally young people will be affected by what they hear and see through TV programs. Young people doesn’t like to stand out of the crowd, because they really don’t know them selves. When they finally find out who they are, it will be easier for them to dare to stand out.

Så er sproget rettet. Men husk, hvis dette er til skole-noget, at du må tage højde for flere ting, fx kultur-forskelle. Desuden vil nogle teenagere netop gerne være anderledes - anderledes fra de voksne, eller fra visse grupper af mennesker, fx vælger nogen at være goth eller punk.
Teksten er fin og meget kort, så det er ikke nemt at få nuancer med, det forstår jeg godt. [:)]

forresten: A2.
Jeg lavede lige et par linjeskift. Én stor blok af tekst er lidt træls at læse, det er som om, man ikke kan trække vejret.

Glemte at rette en fejl. A2.
"The text describes that young people look like each other" skal lyde: "The text describes how young people osv."

Ikke helt korrekt. Anonym
Hej.
Stadig ikke Ikke helt korrekt.
I 2. linie"..who don't live in United States.".
I 5. linie " ..what young people in United States like."
I 9. linie "..don't want to stand out from the crowd"..."don't know themselves."
Man siger ikke America, da det indbefatter både Nord- og Sydamerika.
Likes er 3. person og kun 3. person.
Young people er flertal. Does er 3. person.
Themselves skal i eet ord.
Sådan - hvis du ønsker mere hjælp er jeg til rådighed. Mvh romerus@sol.dk.

Glemte.. Anonym
Hej igen. Titlen: The Global Teenager
Alle ord m. stort i dette tilfælde.
Romerus

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